Thanks all! Got any comments to make me better?

You need to get some funny in your parodies. You pace well, that is not a problem. Maybe you should look at song titles on a lyrics site like webfitz.com, then play with the titles and see if you can fit something funny out of them like, Carly Simon's You're So Vane. When I looked at this song title it was right at the time Saddam's son's were killed and I thought of 'You're So Slain'. After that the rest came fairly easy. You need to come up with an idea based on a song title that you can change or some lines in a song you can use to make the 'story'. Just look all over the site and see how a lot of the more popular parodies do this. Then try to apply it as they did. Anyone else have any suggestioins for Pat? Let's help her out.

Thanks, Guy!

Hi Pat, Try new rhymes , sometimes the first thing that comes to you isn't the best rhyme for your parody . I've noticed that my scores inproved, if tweeked the words a bit. Also see if you can get a "hook" into the first verse to keep the readers interested. Hope this helps. :)

Spelling glitch , That was "improved" not "inproved" .......sorry all.

lol, that one was cool. Keep up your parody skills, and as you write more, your skills improve. :)

Thanks Diva and Marianne

Personally, i think making up a punned title and working it out from there is a bit cheap. And didn't the Troggs do the original of the song above?

This was a request to help a fellow parody writer. Do you have anything to add that would help?

Thought i was. Unfortunately, helping one person sometimes involves criticising another ;)

I do appreciate help, but show me where in the world it says that the Troggs did the original...the main point here is that good, kind people have been willing to help with my parody...the correctness of little details are, to me, beside the pont right now. I don't wish to take away from valued help.

Well, i'm sure the Troggs' version came out in the Sixties, and according to this, the Fancy version is from the Seventies.

Flog me with a wet noodle! :D

I fail to see as you put it how a 'punned' title is cheap? How are you helping anyway? \O/

You could ridicule beloved religious leaders; that always goes over great...Seriously, I liked the "You moved me" part.

Hey, thanks, Claude...that was a fortunate piece of the music that just fell in the right place. :D

Guy DiRito - Cos it seems like a bit of a cop out. It's not exactly hard to see what words, that rhyme or sound similar, would fit into a title, and still make the title make sense, and make it up from there. In my opinion, the best parodies are the ones that have something to do with the original; that add something to or criticise or *parody* the original work.

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