(ABC4) Not only did this not make much sense, it didn't pace all that well, either (at least, to my mind). Sorry, Max.

Sorry, but I agree with Agrimorfee. I kinda understand where you were coming from, Attila the Hun right?

(ABC) ah, thanks Matthias for helping me by making the Attila the "Hun" connection - a bit repetitive Max, but I do get the idea now

(ABC4) So uh...what was the joke? I didn't find one. Atilla and guns are a bit anachronistic, and it overall made no sense. Better luck next time.

(ABC4) I don't get it, and even if I did I can't sing this: the title line fits well enough, but too many lines don't scan, are lifted from the original, or they end with feminine (mis)rhymes (crazy/package) instead of masculine rhymes (insane/rain). I give you credit for taking on a hard song, but this parody is kind of a trainwreck. Sorry, Max. Better luck next time. 333

(ABC4) Hmm. . .Max. . .you know I respect you as a parodist. . .but I have to say I was a bit disappointed in this one, I know you are better than this. . .but what I'd like to do is point out a few things that stuck out to me that would make this a little better, "Attilla Hates The IRS" for one doesn't fit the rhyme scheme at all. . .I.R.S. doesn't rhyme with 'do', rhyme scheme is very important in parody to make reference to the original other wise it may be hard for non-parodist to recognize the original song when reading it. "What did her mommy do?" is probably the most confusing line to me because in the first paragraph, Attilla is a male (he, his, he'll) and now in the second Atilla is a female, and then a male again in the third. . .I'm sure this was an accident, but that is very important in your writing. . .you have to be careful. . .You should read your work before posting it, had you tried to sing this to the original you probably would have caught that (he/her) switch. "there's no way he'll ever gonna stop." also probably would have been caught. He'll translates to "He Will". . .Naturally that makes use of the word 'gonna' (which is the same as will in a sense) obsolete. . .perhaps "There's no way he's ever gonna stop." would work better. I also will point out Atilla doesn't really scan to Janie. . .Jan-e is a quick pronounce two syllable name while A-til-la is a three syllable one that when pronounced correctly stretches the middle syllable a bit. That will work however because the original is forgiving in it's own pacing, however without recording it, it would be hard to show that for the purpose of grading (that's why I record everything) Anyhow. . .all that said, I know you took on a difficult song, and I applaud that, but take a little more time Max, I've read much better than this from you and know you are capable of much better than this.

Not your best. I dont normally give 333s, but here's one

I knew where you were coming from with Attila, not sure where you were going.

(ABC) And here I was thinking it would be about Attila the Hun...sorry, Max, couldn't crack this here nut. (It doesn't help that I hate the OS!)

ABC- OK I thought this was about Attila the Hun as well, so I, like others, am confused as well. Good effort, though.