DKOS, but can tell this is well written, with humerous content and deserves acknowledgment and fives..

Thanks!!! This is only my second one, but it's the first one where I really wanted to be funny. I hope to write a lot more. But coule you please tell me what DKOS stands for?

Cat - "DK(T)OS" stands for "Don't Know(The) Original Song"...meaning the commenter can't judge whether your pacing and emphasis fit the structure of that piece. Usually that indicates they are not voting, but sometimes folks make exceptions...

Cat, since I DO happen to know (and actually have) this song I went back and dug it out and played it. You did a real nice job on the pace here. It's just about perfect, except that those final four lines get repeated again at the end. I gave you a "4-5-4" here, but I liked what you did quite a bit, especially for only your 2nd parody piece. Suggestion: On those repetitive chorus (or other very repetitive sections) parts try to find ways to vary them in your piece. In this particular OS my initial take is that it would be rather hard to do it much differently than you did...but I still would suggest at least playing around with some different combinations and seeing if you can find a way to fit some extra twist or some fun puns in to replace some, or maybe even all of them...Yeah, a lot of work...and probably too much to ask at this point if you have only done two. But it won't hurt to play around with the concept...you might come up empty...but you might also really put together something that really stands out and shines. If nothing else it will likely increase your linguistic agility...not a bad trade-off, actually...BTW - Since I'm making a detailed remark here I should point out that you did do a really fine job of the rhyming and matching the verse pacing and making it clever and funny. Hope to see more of your stuff around, maybe I'll even know the OS material...

Thanks for the suggestions, Paul. =)

Agree with Paul here, it's not bad and kinda funny - so same vote, 4-5-4