First stanza's not bad, but the rhythm falls apart in the second. How do you get "Don't bother selling that solo album" to fit the cadence of "Take off that gloomy mask of tragedy"? Sorry, I just can't hear it.

The "a" in "album" should be streched to accomodate the two syllables of "tra ge"

Hmm, ok. But I think you can probably come up with a line that fits the rhythm better ... something like "Throw all your albums in a garbage bag/They're not worthwhile" etc. Same with the next line, which was originally "You'll look so good that you'll be glad ya decided to smile!" Your line would work better if it was something like, "I much prefer the bleach-blond rapper who/Starred in Eight Mile." Just food for thought.

I liked N sync but not his solo career so your the one sharing my official page huh? welcome just don't do anything to make people think you are me

in other words I did NOT write this it's a different Jonathan this was written before I knew that this site existed!