Excellent pacing - kinda scary tho'! :-0

Thanks Merry. You know, I was worried it would come across scarier than intended. In sticking to the strict format of the orignal, I ran out of room to resolve the narrator into the more sympathetic character I pictured in my mind, (in other words, the song was shorter than I'd remembered, so the submission is basically an act short of a play,) so I opted to cheat a little by using the introductory message to try to set this character's stage. With an additional verse and chorus set, I'd have done that in the resolution, instead. The extra verse would have been used to illustrate that he's harmless and doesn't mind paying his fair share but feels, sometimes, that he's shouldering the burden, alone and is taken for granted by those who benefit from his toils. I had two resolutions in mind for final chorus -- one has him clocking back in from his break ("...my break is ending..."?) and the other has him drifting off into a much needed sleep ("I'm so sleepy..."?) to do it all again, dutifully, tomorrow -- both actions taking place far away from towers, arsonals and innocent bystanders. (Shoot, I'm rambling, sorry if I've bored you. Thanks for the read & rate! Sorry for creeping you out. :) )

I thought it was good

Thanks Billy!

Good Job, kind of dark, but well written

Thanks Diva!

Good job, Melhi.

Thanks Pippin!

Excellent commentary on the squeezing of the working person.

Thanks Tim!